literature

Sleepless

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Literature Text

As I lie awake
I can't help but think of you
One more sleepless night
... ♥

I wanted this poem to have a sort of nostalgic feel to it.
Do you think the words are clear enough to portray that emotion?
I am open to any suggestions for improvement. (:
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SlipShodTodd's avatar
I'm trying really quite hard, but everything's spot on, no improvement request from me.